Feedback on my task 2

[phenomenal-dev]

Hello @Raffysul @Judith0001 and my fellow contributors

Here's my Task 2 here. Please I'll like to know what I can do better. Thank you

[myloothniel]

Hi @phenomenal-dev, I looked through your work and it's really good. I like the playfulness of your story, the colors and theme, it's a really good one, it's also very engaging.

I initially felt you had many characters in your skill tree and was unsure how you would put them together and make a cohesive story, you pulled it off quite well. You can proof read it again to ensure some characters were not under-utilised.

I'd say you could go through your skill table and proof read it again, to correct any errors and adjust some words.
It's a good one, well-done .

I'm pretty sure @Raffysul @Judith0001 would see anything i may not have pointed out to help you adjust your work.
Well-done again!

[phenomenal-dev]

Thank you so much @myloothniel, I'll review the points you pointed out.

[maryann-nwagba]

Hi @phenomenal-dev
Well done on your work, you did a really good job.
If I were to point anything out, questions in your script should still be about the characters in the script. Try not to introduce new characters.

[phenomenal-dev]

Oh, that's a great observation.

Thank you @maryann-nwagba, I'll make corrections

[phenomenal-dev]

@Raffysul, please I'm still waiting for a feedback from you

[Raffysul]

I think Judith gave feedback on your submission yesterday. It was probably cleared when her account got restricted. I'll get back soon.

[phenomenal-dev]

Alright, Thank you very much @Raffysul

[Raffysul]

@phenomenal-dev Hello, thank you for your contributions.

-Your skill tree has been reviewed earlier, so I'll pass it.

On your skill table,

• I'll be reviewing lesson 1, you can make the necessary corrections on the remaining lessons.
• Proofread your work for punctuation, spelling errors and your sentence structure.
• Your explanations should be broken up with concept questions, such that there is no overload of information at a stretch.
• Most of your questions are a regurgitation of the concepts you explained, you should be testing their in-depth knowledge of the skills.
• Check the feedback I gave here as a guide.
• In lesson 1 skill 3, instead of using 'scientific names', why not use 'medical terms'? I probably missed this when I reviewed the skill tree.

On your story outline:

• Great characters, but there is no hook or motivation in your lesson 1, that is, an event, incident, or situation that serves as a foundation for the topic. In a story outline, an introduction to a concept should be aimed towards correcting a relatable misconception.
• You can read through the Hygiene and Disease lessons to understand this better. The guide to creating science lessons will help too.
• Also, proofread your work for punctuation, spelling errors and sentence structure.
• Peruse the sample docs given as a guide.

On your script:

• Proofread your work for punctuation, spelling errors and sentence structure.
• As I stated regarding your story outline, there's no hook in your lesson delivery. Kids are eager to learn new concepts when their curiosity is piqued. For example, in the Hygiene and Disease lesson, the main character learnt about communicable diseases when he visited his friend but met his absence. His friend's mother informed him of his friend's medical condition and proceeded to explain the concepts of communicable and non-communicable diseases to him. That's served as a hook or motivation for the lesson. You can peruse the sample docs given to understand more about this.
• Most of your questions are not really testing the skills.

Overall, well done on your work.

[phenomenal-dev]

Thank you @Raffysul. I'll get to work on them