From f71007c9da64dd280a8e45a7c1502549505d12b6 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Nico Salm <nbsalm@wisc.edu>
Date: Sun, 19 May 2024 12:19:41 -0500
Subject: [PATCH] enh: remaster of introduction statements (#186)

clarity and conciseness
---
 src/pages/index.astro | 24 +++++++++---------------
 1 file changed, 9 insertions(+), 15 deletions(-)

diff --git a/src/pages/index.astro b/src/pages/index.astro
index 2a42e39..754d3b1 100644
--- a/src/pages/index.astro
+++ b/src/pages/index.astro
@@ -47,32 +47,26 @@ const DiscordLink = "https://discord.gg/dmefFzm";
 			<div class={DescriptionStyle.box}>
 				<h1 class={DescriptionStyle.title}>Who we are...</h1>
 				<p class={DescriptionStyle.description}>
-					The UPL is a social club that goes back 40 years. Stop by
-					whenever the room is open! Feel free to stop by between
-					classes or as a place to eat your lunch. Coordinators are
-					happy to answer questions, help with homework, help start a
-					project, and more! Or, don't come in with any goal at all!
-					We'd love to meet you.
+                    The UPL is a social club with a proud 40-year legacy. 
+                    We invite you to visit us whenever the room is open, whether to relax between classes, enjoy lunch, or simply unwind. 
+                    We’d love to welcome you!
 				</p>
 			</div>
 			<div class="divider lg:divider-horizontal"/>
 			<div class={DescriptionStyle.box}>
 				<h1 class={DescriptionStyle.title}>Who we are NOT...</h1>
 				<p class={DescriptionStyle.description}>
-					The UPL itself does not do any projects. Rather, people
-					within the lab do projects, and use the space as a way to
-					connect with other UW students. Check out our blog to see
-					what UPL'ers are up to.
+                    The UPL itself doesn't run projects.
+                    Rather, it's a space where members work on their own initiatives and connect with fellow UW students.
+                    Check out our blog to see what UPL'ers are up to!
 				</p>
 			</div>
 			<div class="divider lg:divider-horizontal"/> 
 			<div class={DescriptionStyle.box}>
 				<h1 class={DescriptionStyle.title}>Where are we...</h1>
 				<p class={DescriptionStyle.description}>
-					We are in <strong>room 1341</strong>, the triangle shaped
-					room on the <strong>first floor of the CS building</strong>.
-					We will also have a dedicated space in Morgridge Hall in
-					Fall 2025🎉.
+                    Visit us in <strong>Computer Sciences Room 1341</strong>, the triangle-shaped room on the <strong>first floor</strong>.
+                    We’re thrilled to announce that in Fall 2025, we’ll have a dedicated space in Morgridge Hall 🎉.
 				</p>
 			</div>
 		</div>
@@ -85,7 +79,7 @@ const DiscordLink = "https://discord.gg/dmefFzm";
 			<div class={QAStyles.box}>
 				<h1 class={QAStyles.header}>Do I need to be a CS major?</h1>
 				<p class={QAStyles.answer}>
-					No! While we're a CS focused organization, you don't need to
+					No! While we're a CS-focused organization, you don't need to
 					be a CS major!
 				</p>
 			</div>